Verbs
-pulling
-yelling
-bouncing
-splahing
-pushing
-grasping
-gripping
-bearing
-exhorting
-concentrating
-rushing
Sensory Details
Feel: The water splashing, the adrenaline rush, the pain buliding in my arms, and the paddle stuck to my hand.
Taste: The salty air.
Hear: Wind flying past me, the scattered shouts from the crowd, the crews words in your ears, the rythmic splashes against the canoe, and the whack of the paddle against the water.
See: The shining waves of water, the paddles dipping in the water, people hair bobing up and down, the crowds of people shouting, the sun in your eyes, and the other canoes flying past you.
Smell: The salt in the water.
Hi Kiyo,
ReplyDeleteGreat details! and proving he point that the best writing comes from personal experience!
Next step is to put the best details together into a unified paragraph :)
Assessment Score: 4/3
mrs s